FEEDBACK:
Courtney: Are you going to be filming the whole film in one place?
Owen: Its good that you can keep it simple in one place to avoid practical issues.
Esther: Realistically can you use the heads office?
Tyra: I like how you can tell the theme is greed as its consistent throughout the treatment
Miss: The story is quite long, maybe it could be better if you shortened the ending because otherwise it gets a bit too deep for the film, baring in mind you've only got 5 minutes and spending lot's of time on the ending might make it boring. It's too heavy for a quick film, and should end when Ed gets taken away. You need to tie the ending up nicely, this is as important as the plot twist in the middle, you need to do it really well. One idea could be Mr Cross' next victim coming into a room and asking to borrow a pen so that the end matches the beginning.
Miss: Why does Mr Cross want pens? Where is the motivation?
Owen: Who is Mr Cross?
Miss: You should use police detective like language to bring the comedic factors
Ed is a young teenager attending school, he enjoys stealing stationary from other students and is a mischievous boy causing him to be disliked. Ed started stealing to find comfort in being alone, however he is starting to become increasingly greedy, stealing a large amount of pens at school. His proficient stealing skills results in him being offered a new opportunity, but does he turn it out down or let the greed consume him?
Ed’s rebellious nature results in him getting detention as he does not do his maths homework, his teacher, Mr Cross, gives him detention for after school to which Ed attends.
In detention Ed asks Mr Cross for a pen despite having stolen many pens that day, Mr Cross is clearly not pleased but is interrupted by a call and steps outside to take it. Ed is hungry for more pens and starts to steal a lot more of Mr Cross' pens, suddenly he can hear Mr Cross out in the hallway coming back into the classroom but he is consumed by greed and decides to risk it and take another pen. He is caught in the act by Mr Cross who stops Ed and notices his open bag full of pens he has stolen today, Mr Cross sends Ed to the Head teachers office as punishment. Realising that he has been caught, Ed begins to panic and worry. As he is close to arriving at the Head teachers office, he can see in the distance Mr Cross standing at the door in a stern manner, however as he approaches he can see that Mr Cross is smiling, he then says "So ... you like pens, eh?".
Unexpectedly Mr Cross exclaims how he admires Ed’s stationary stealing skills and offers him the opportunity to steal as many pens as he likes, he takes Ed to a secret room in the school that is set up with a large mind map filled with pictures of pens and people, he explains to Ed his plan to steal pens back from the students. Mr Cross is motivated by his dislike of pupils who asks for pens put never return them. Ed and Mr Cross set up a incredible pen stealing network in the school, with Ed being the master stealer and Mr Cross setting Ed up.
Over a few weeks Ed begins to steal more and more pens, becoming very greedy in nature. Mr Cross offers Ed the opportunity of the ‘Ultimate Pen Heist’ in which they steal a box of red pens, which are the rarest and hardest to steal, from the Head teachers office, as Ed is consumed by greed he immediately takes up the opportunity. However, Mr Cross betrays Ed in order to steal the red pens for himself and Ed is caught by the head teacher stealing from his office and is handed over to the pen police. At the end we see Mr Cross standing outside the Headmasters office as a young boy approaches him, smiling like before, he says to the young boy, "So ... you like pens, eh?" whilst inviting him into his secret room.
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